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QUICK! GRAMMAR NAZIS!

Which is it:

1.) Providing children with positive adult role models, who illistrate ways to build self-confidence, develop skills and find avenues of success in our free enterprise system, is a hallmark of {organization's name}.

2.) Providing children with positive adult role models, who illistrate ways to build self-confidence, develop skills, and find avenues of success in our free enterprise system, is a hallmark of {organization's name}.

3.) Providing children with positive adult role models; who illistrate ways to build self-confidence, develop skills and find avenues of success in our free enterprise system; is a hallmark of {organization's name}.

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Re: QUICK! GRAMMAR NAZIS!

  • are the "adult role models" the "who" that is illistrating ways to build self confidence... ?
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  • Yeah, that part makes more sense in relation to the entire paragraph. Sorry!

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  • imageSookie Stackhouse:

    Yeah, that part makes more sense in relation to the entire paragraph. Sorry!

    then I would actually take out the commas and put it like this

    Providing children with positive adult role models who illistrate ways to build self-confidence, develop skills, and find avenues of success in our free enterprise system is a hallmark of {organization's name}.

    I think you are overusing commas the other way, and semicolon is not appropriate (except I always use a comma before the "and" in a list, APA and all...)

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  • WTF TN?! LET ME QUOTE!!!!

    Jilly - thanks! I definitely like that much better. I'm doing a proof of my director's proposal and it's full of random stuff like that, but this section tossed me for a loop a bit. Thanks again!

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  • Yup. The sentence structure might sound better if you wrote it like "One hallmark of [company] is providing children with positive adult role models who illistrate ways to build self-confidence, develop skills, and find avenues of success in our free enterprise system." or something.

    ETA I think either would be correct, one might just sound better to you than the other, its a personal preference at that point I think.

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  • And it's "illustrate".
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  • imageKCD053109:
    And it's "illustrate".

    lol I didn't even catch that when reading. Now I posted it twice! haha irony.

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  • imageJillyWtP:
    imageSookie Stackhouse:

    Yeah, that part makes more sense in relation to the entire paragraph. Sorry!

    then I would actually take out the commas and put it like this

    Providing children with positive adult role models who illustrate ways to build self-confidence, develop skills, and find avenues of success in our free enterprise system is a hallmark of {organization's name}.

    I think you are overusing commas the other way, and semicolon is not appropriate (except I always use a comma before the "and" in a list, APA and all...)

    This is what I was going to say. No comma needed between models and who. 

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  • imageKCD053109:
    And it's "illustrate".
    Lol. I thought I was losing my mind thinking there was a u in it. 
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