Critique my invite please.

samk213

I haven?t done an invite since our wedding.  Is this laid out properly? Should the ?R? in Requests be capitalized?  And in the second paragraph should the ?On? and ?At? be capitalized?  I do have an email for the RSVP.  Thanks!

The Commanding Officer of Marine Wing Support Squadron 473 Detachment Bravo Requests the pleasure of your company at the Retirement Ceremony of   XXX   On Sunday the sixteenth day of August at fifteen hundred hours at the Navy Reserve Center, Building 1803 on Doolittle Avenue Naval Air Station Fort Worth Joint Reserve Base Fort Worth, Texas 76217   Attire: Military participants: Desert Utilities Civilian: Appropriate Attire Reception immediately following RSVP by August 9^th, 2009

Gipper'sGirl

I'm not 100% certain, so wait for some other responses, but I don't think any of the words in question should be capatalized.  Will people know what "appropriate attire" is?

Carrie50

I don't think they need to be capitalized - but I'm not 100% sure

I agree the PP - will everyone know what appropriate attire means?

samk213

You're right, I just researched invite etiquette, no capitalization at all.  I hope people know what "appropriate attire" is because that part is in the standard operating code for sending out invites for military functions and I can't change it. 

Gipper'sGirl

samk213:

I hope people know what "appropriate attire" is because that part is in the standard operating code for sending out invites for military functions and I can't change it. 

I've never attended a military function, so I didn't know that.  In that case, looks good!

Temp206787500007404

Do you need all of the "ons" and "ats"?  I think it sounds just as good if you leave them off and then you don't have to worry about capitalization at all. 

Mrs.Reaux

sorry - can't help you

I started thinking about men in uniforms and my heart skipped a beat....I can't think straight

cforester

Mrs.Reaux:

sorry - can't help you

I started thinking about men in uniforms and my heart skipped a beat....I can't think straight

 

Love it!

JoyGotDots

I made a few changes, taking out some of the little words that aren't necessary.

 

The Commanding Officer of

Marine Wing Support Squadron 473

Detachment Bravo

Requests the pleasure of your company

at the Retirement Ceremony of

 

XXX

 

Sunday, the sixteenth of August

at fifteen hundred hours

 

Navy Reserve Center, Building 1803

Doolittle Avenue

Naval Air Station Fort Worth

Joint Reserve Base

Fort Worth, Texas 76217

 

Attire:

Military participants: Desert Utilities

Civilian: Appropriate Attire

Reception immediately following

RSVP by August 9^th, 2009

 

samk213

Joygotdots - I changed it and it's identical to what you suggested.  Thanks everyone!