can you proof read this for me?

sacey21

my aunt wants us all to write some memories about my grandfather and she is going to put them into a little book. will you read what i wrote and tell me if there are any grammar errors? i might add more, but i wouldn't mind some grammar proofing

thanks!! 

 

I could tell you about the time that Pop had to dig my carout of a snowy ditch or the time he told me that he thought highly of mywriting.  I could tell you how hemarched me into the President of RIC?s (or as he would say, R-I-C) office orhow he called in favors so that I could get into classes. I might tell you thestory about how he once took me sailing or about how he made me get LizaMinnelli?s autograph. I could tell you stories about singing silly camp songs,shopping trips, tractor rides and hiking in the woods.

But all that matters is that those memories, those momentswith my grandfather, have helped me to become me. These memories are mixed intomy soul, my very being. They are a part of me.

He taught me to embrace life and to embrace people and toembrace learning. He helped me to become brave and confident in myself. Hetaught me that memories need to be made and that family traditions are animportant part of life. He showed me that it is okay to sometimes have theunpopular opinion.

My Pop wasn?t really one to say ?I love you,? but lookingback, I guess he didn?t have to. He might not have said it, but he showed it.He showed us with every handmade Birthday card, the Valentine?s in ourmailboxes, every candy bar (or bar of soap) he brought back from Ireland, everybook he gave us, every chocolate cabinet he made for us, our yearly Christmasshopping trip to the 5 and 10 (and later the $1 Store). He showed us by namingpaths and fields with our names. He showed us with every ?hoo-hoo? he shoutedto us and every blob of butter he stuck on our noses while we blew out ourbirthday candles.

Maybe he just didn?t think the words were as important asthe actions?

 I?ll miss hisloud sneezes and his whiskey scented kisses.

 

 

Kris&Jay08

I didn't even check the grammar because I was too embraced by the story, you brought tears to my eyes. I too was very close to my grandfather, more so than any other grandchild. We lost him 8 years ago last week.

I am so very sorry for your loss and you wrote such a sweet story of memories...

PeterJudesMommy

Aw man - I think it's perfect.  Just absolutely perfect.

asf619

It's probably just how it was C&Ped, but it is missing lots of spaces between words. Otherwise, what you have written is wonderful. I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors.

asf619

Here's what I mean. I bolded the words where the space is missing:

sacey21:

 

I could tell you about the time that Pop had to dig my carout of a snowy ditch or the time he told me that he thought highly of mywriting.  I could tell you how hemarched me into the President of RIC?s (or as he would say, R-I-C) office orhow he called in favors so that I could get into classes. I might tell you thestory about how he once took me sailing or about how he made me get LizaMinnelli?s autograph. I could tell you stories about singing silly camp songs,shopping trips, tractor rides and hiking in the woods.

But all that matters is that those memories, those momentswith my grandfather, have helped me to become me. These memories are mixed intomy soul, my very being. They are a part of me.

He taught me to embrace life and to embrace people and toembrace learning. He helped me to become brave and confident in myself. Hetaught me that memories need to be made and that family traditions are animportant part of life. He showed me that it is okay to sometimes have theunpopular opinion.

My Pop wasn?t really one to say ?I love you,? but lookingback, I guess he didn?t have to. He might not have said it, but he showed it.He showed us with every handmade Birthday card, the Valentine?s in ourmailboxes, every candy bar (or bar of soap) he brought back from Ireland, everybook he gave us, every chocolate cabinet he made for us, our yearly Christmasshopping trip to the 5 and 10 (and later the $1 Store). He showed us by namingpaths and fields with our names. He showed us with every ?hoo-hoo? he shoutedto us and every blob of butter he stuck on our noses while we blew out ourbirthday candles.

Maybe he just didn?t think the words were as important asthe actions?

 I?ll miss hisloud sneezes and his whiskey scented kisses.

sacey21

Thank you!! I'm always paranoid about mixing up my tenses and/or using too many commas! Lol

asf619

"He taught me to embrace life and to embrace people and to embrace learning."

I think it should have a comma in place of the first "and." So... 

"He taught me to embrace life, to embrace people and to embrace learning. "

sacey21

asf619:

"He taught me to embrace life and to embrace people and to embrace learning."

I think it should have a comma in place of the first "and." So... 

"He taught me to embrace life, to embrace people and to embrace learning. "

you are so right. thanks!! 

kmm13

PeterJudesMommy:

Aw man - I think it's perfect.  Just absolutely perfect.

This!  That was very sweet. What a wonderful grandfather!